Saturday, September 29, 2012

New Haiku

"To live is so startling
it leaves little time for anything else."
Emily Dickinson
1830-1886

     A few weeks ago, Nick Nunziata asked, "Mr. Carter, why don't we have a lecture day in Creative Writing like we do in Art? You could tell us about writers." A great idea. So, these past two weeks we have heard words and stories from Emily Dickinson and Langston Hughes- two giants in the field of poetry. We also discussed and practiced free-verse, the Sestina and Haiku. Will Durant said, "Nothing is new except arrangement."

Here are a few new arrangements:



the whiteness and snow
it tends to always go slow
flowers spring again

William Lampke


snow starting to fall
the wind starting to blow now
it's time to get warm

Lindsay Frasciello


hot and blistering
kids playing in the water
long days with no school

Darian Bolten


red blossoms falling
morning dew is sweet and warm
the sun is rising

Cuinn McDermott


black ice and white snow
then the searing wind blows
snow melts, sidewalk shows

Elizabeth Hemingway


top corner, hard shot
can't stand baseball, too boring
back of the net, goal

Brad Andrews


the celadon tree
pale grey green I will miss
that tree will be missed

Jake Dudzik


he was a ruler
yet he was very spleenful
he will fall one day

Sara Ofenloch


don't eat celadon
wait, can you eat a color?
yes, I think you can

Emma Carter


his celadon skin
made me worry about him
go to the doctor

John Chirchirillo




Saturday, September 8, 2012

Elements of Style

"Find a subject you care about and which you in your heart feel others should care about. It is this genuine caring, not your games with language, which will be the most compelling and seductive element in your style."
Kurt Vonnegut

"The words of the wise prod us to live well. They're like nails hammered home, holding life together. They are given by God, the one Shepherd."
Ecclesiastes 12:11
The Message


     Oh, the power twenty-six letters can wield. Writers know that it is the arrangement of the words which constitutes style- the writer's voice. Trinity students are seeking their voice and I am blessed to hear their early notes.



Maddie's Ability to Drown Out Noise
Madeline Keller

I struggle deeply
to focus
on things like
Math, Science, and Art
when people 
never stop talking
to leave me alone
with my thoughts.




A Prose Poem
Carly McGirt

     A long time ago there was a lady I knew who had cancer and was in the hospital for weeks. She had cancer and she died. My family and I prayed for her and I would always comfort, protect, feel sorry and show her love. She was one of my favorite people. I loved her like I love almost everyone the way they are. I really cared about her. I would take care of her while she was laying peacefully in the hospital dying. I started to cry because it's sad when people or animals die and I loved her so much. She was happy, good hearted and she loved the Lord, like me. She would always make me smile and feel joy. My family and I would go and visit her. She died from cancer. But she is peacefully with our awesome God.



My Love
John Chirchirillo

Love is painfully dry
but also moist, in a wonderful matrimony of
flour, berries, and sometimes chocolate.
From flat to puffy.
From England to France.
Scones and crepes are my love.



I Love You
Sophia Kalyuzhnaya

Funnel cake filled my festive mood,
when I saw you I went right to the counter
smiling.
I powdered that powdered sugar,
oh how I adore.
I make then I bake.
My love for funnel cakes is extraordinary.
Just the juicy, oily but delicious pieces of the
whole thing
make me happy.
Especially when you are accessorized with strawberries and ice
cream.
Oh, how I only
see you in carnivals, circuses, and festivals,
let's find each other.
We will be together one day, I promise.
I love you,
funnel cakes.



Poem
Alexander Jones

Two lovers, once young and lively, had now come far from delicious, flavorful bread. They sat in the toaster too long. They were now nothing but burnt toast. They popped out of the toaster oven after about twenty years, and they were both rock solid. They had been there for so long that they had nowhere to go. They were stuck with each other, burnt and still burning.



Love
Aaron McPeak

Love is hard and crunchy,
love is soft.
Love is cooked on a skillet,
love is brown.
Love is delicious.
Love is
bacon.



Untitled
Isaac Catchatoorian

Precariously opening her heart
scars that will hopefully fade
she has been fearful from the start
looking for the one God has made
lonely here and there
just one more chance would be fair



Untitled
Nick Miller

in the sun's glare
I was laying in the grass,
thinking, and sleeping.
looking at the clouds and wondering,
'how was the world created?'
Who was the creator?
and I wonder if the are happy with the
world.



Love
Jake Dudzik

Love is like a chocolate bar.
It tastes good
but it makes you lose control
when you have had too much.
With its milk chocolate outside
and wafer filling inside,
you are sure to have a sugar rush.
So much love
and so much chocolate
in this world.
But not everyone likes it.



This is the End
By Elizabeth Hemingway

This is the end
I can see it now
My death is upon me
My heart starts to pound
Im thirsty
Im hungry
But theres no food or water in sight
This is the end
I can see a bright light
I look up at my captor
And I then i start to beg
For him to grant me mercy
But he just shakes his head.
I fall to the floor
For sure I am finished
Then my captor says "Get up son"
"Youve only been in timeout for ten minutes."

Sunday, September 2, 2012

A New Day

"Why should we write? We should write because it is human nature to write. We should write because writing brings clarity and passion to the act of living. We should write because writing is good for the soul."
The Right to Write



A sampling of student work from week one:




AlphabetamericA
by John Chirchirillo

America
became
confused,
dumb,
evil,
fat,
greedy,
"heroes"
in
justifying
killing
loving
mammals.
Now
our
propensity
questionably
resembles
self-
terrorizing
ulteristic
vultures
wanting
xenogenetic
zealousness.


Everyday
by Madeline Keller

Everyday. People
pray. Scared
of sin. Don't
let it in. Here
we wait. Hiding
hate. Afraid
to die. And
face our fate.


Warfare
by Cuinn McDermott

War destroys life
Air warfare is full of unknown danger
Rarely do people come back unchanged
From all countries arise war
All war is foolish
Red blood covers the ground
Everyone is gone


America
by Sara Cazorla

Amazing birds chirping
Miracle wishes
Excellent people
Remembering sweet memories
Interesting thoughts
Clapping hands
Applause all over the world


Music
by David King

Making tones always
United across the world
Sadly auto tuned
Intervention for musicians
Classy people lose it


Celebrity
by Darian Bolten

Constant fans, screaming
Electrifying crowds
Liars happen a lot
Even more end up doing drugs
Big movie stars
Reacting when something happens to them
International fame and fortune
Too many break ups and make-ups
Yes, they can live normal lives


An Abcdarium
by Isaac Catchatoorian

Among this sad world,
Boisterous beings (although very rare)
Claim themselves: never bored

Denoting the negative,
Enriching our lives,
Furthering the positive

Gratefully living,
Hoping for the best,
Intellectually perceiving,
Jokingly being

Kindness is their key
Loving all those 'round
Motivating us to try
New things we see

Opening our minds
People come together
Questioning why one doesn't like another

Running to the finish
Stopping no time soon
Turn back now
U will be sad when you lose

Venturing to new heights
Worrying not about fail
X-emplifying true leaders
Young,
Zealous beings who will always care



Celebrity
by Emma Carter

Constantly fighting
Everyone is watching
Lights always flashing
Even the best can fall
Being so well known can
Ruin your spirit
Integrity is rare
Trust is scarce
Your worth is in the hands of the world



Alphabet poem
By Elizabeth Hemingway

A
dults think they know everything. I just don't understand them. For example, they love
B
abies. I can't imagine why? They can't do anything and everyone loves them just
C
uz they're babies. But they're useless
D
uh.
E
veryone knows that all they're good
F
or is crying, sleeping, and
G
awking aimlessly at things.
H
ow is that cute?
I
don't know why adults are so hung up on them, they only turn into to toddlers who
J
ump on the furniture and make a huge mess of everything. Like my cousin mickey
K
now what else I hate about toddlers? They get away with everything because they're
L
ittle. "Oh..little Mickey couldn't have done that.."
M
ickey didn't know any better" "Mickeys just too little to know its wrong.
N
o, he's EVIL.. Did you ever think that maybe he understands perfectly?
O
r that he's waiting to strike again?
P
lease, adults never think things through. But I know the truth. I'll get him to
Q
uit his evil doing once and for all!
R
ight after I get out of time out. Right now I'm forced to just
S
it here waiting for him to strike. Nothing else to do but watch the
T
imer...
U
gh... I just know he's out there, laughing at me. It's his fault. He messed with the
V
acuum cleaner, not me.
W
ell... guess who got blamed? Me. He just does whatever he wants. Like breaking my
X
-men action figures. Then if I fight back, he frames me, and no matter how much I
Y
ell that I'm innocent, they don't listen. Well... He better not be playing with my toy
Z
ebra. I will stop him, one day I will stop evil doing. I swear. After the timer rings that is...


The power of words
By Elizabeth Hemingway

Words are powerful
They can bring you up with one sentence
Just as easily as they can take you down

They can make you feel on top of the world
And they can crush your hopes and dreams
Break your spirit

But the happiest words of all
Are "I love you" from the mouth of the one
Most close to you
And the words that hurt the most
The ones that can change your life
Are those two so very small yet so very powerful words
"Good bye"